Prose: Passing into the Abyss {testing excerpts}

So I’m thinking of writing a book based upon the concept of death and the mysteries and experiences that surround it. Using the foundation of my philosophical writings I am trying to depict the journey of a man who passes over. Here’s what I have so far: (criticisms, advice and comments would be much appreciated)…

A Change in Perception

Pupils dilate, muscles relax, thoughts deepen, emotions heighten, the world spins within your head, and all at once your senses merge inducing a confusion of reality. Am I dreaming? No you’re not. Look above you and watch the stars appear on the darkened canvas; flicks of paint on your work overalls, particles on dust which…

You Want to Dream

You want to dream of what you can’t touch, of how things could be, of what everything really means? Then why are you here, sat in front of a television letting it absorb your unique thoughts with each pulsating pixel? Why are you slumped on the armchair sipping that chemically enhanced drink and drooling over…